How's My Driving | April 2013

[ironwood]

Spring has been sprung! All over the Western hemisphere, flowers are blooming, bunnies are bounding, and the little clickity-clack of rper fingers at keyboards is in the air! To kick off the season in style, it's time for our third HMD here at Tu Shanshu.

How's My Driving?
While each and every character must have an HMD page available, we offer a gamewide HMD once every calendar quarter. This is an opportunity to get together and discuss IC interpretations and portrayals in a respectful, beneficial fashion. In a nutshell, it's a chance to see how we're doing in the grand scheme of things.

There are a few ground rules to cover off before we can start:

• Participation in the quarterly HMD is 100% optional.
  
• Be respectful, anon or not. It's a lot easier to give and receive crit if all parties are making it a discussion of it rather than an argument.
  
• IP logging is off and anonymous commenting is on. You can offer crit signed-in if you like, but the option's there.
  

That's it, that's all!

And, to make things easier, here's a handy-dandy codeset:

<big><b><i>Player Name</i></b></big> <i>Character Name:</i> <i>Canon:</i> <i>User Name:</i> <I>Focus:</i> Optional. Do you have particular concerns about your portrayal that you'd like to be the focus of crit? You can link any threads you'd like a second opinion on here. If you're looking for structural feedback, or would prefer things like grammar not be mentioned, put it here.

Comments

[flamingshortshorts]

I have really enjoyed everything I've seen so far with Ava and I think you're on the right track with her. But in regards to the question about avoiding making her too generic, maybe remember to add in her conversational quirks? Body language, fillers, etc. She has a habit of rolling her hands, hand on her hips, crossing her arms, pointing at people when she's talking, also she mutters a bit, but not really in a way that implies she's trying to actually avoid people hearing what she's saying.

[superoverachiever]

She does! I should... put those in more of her tags, yeah, since she just loves the video and you're right, she is very physically present that way.

(Sometimes I DO those things when I'm writing her but then I forget nobody can see me and I have to write them down O_O) Same with the volume levels sometimes, I'll have an idea in my head that this part is louder and while she's making direct eye contact with her arms folded and the next bit is dropping her hands some and quieting down to just below regular volume and then I end up just writing out dialogue with nothing with it.

Actionspam is still a very new thing to me, this is good to keep in mind.

[flamingshortshorts]

I've always found that adding a bit of extra introspection and body language into a tag really helps make a character feel more like an individual and less like a cut-out of some trope so hopefully it works out for you.